Precipice
Teetering on the rim
of crystal so thin
a butterfly’s wing could
send her tumbling back
down, down, down
into the glass carnival
Where distorted lens
meets bloodshot eye
Where feet lose footing,
sliding on the gloss
Where beating on the wall
can cut you to the bone
Where they can look in
but she is alone
trapped in prisms
of sunlight’s whim
Where is she’s not careful
she will be burned to an ashen memory
The limits are clear,
but not so the options
© 2011 Amy Barlow Liberatore/Sharp Little Pencil
For ABC Wednesday, the letter “P”; for We Write Poems, “Take it to the Limit,” and, as always, at Poets United, the home of so many wordsmiths, for Thursday Think Tank: Monsters. If you visit these blogs, either click on the “comments” button to access the work of plenty of amazing poets, or at ABC, simply click on a face! Peace, Amy
Roger Green
May 4, 2011 at 4:01 pm
Love the last verse – the notion of endless possibilities has seldom resonated with me.
Sharp Little Pencil
May 7, 2011 at 6:24 am
Then I will wish you that notion. I know it’s true, Roger, and the best gift I could give you is that hope! Amy
Elephant Small
May 4, 2011 at 4:46 pm
Often we’re not offered any options…
Sharp Little Pencil
May 7, 2011 at 6:25 am
And sometimes we have to stop and let the options catch up with us. It often happens when we least expect! Amy
pamelasayers
May 4, 2011 at 5:37 pm
A surreal journey, Amy. Beautifully written.
Pamela
vivinfrance
May 4, 2011 at 5:44 pm
There is a thread of assonance running through this which is delightful, as are the images your poem conjures up.
Sharp Little Pencil
May 7, 2011 at 6:28 am
Viv, I appreciate this – you pick out things a lot of folks don’t, including myself!! Amy
Isabel
May 4, 2011 at 5:51 pm
great poem
Sharp Little Pencil
May 7, 2011 at 10:22 pm
Thank you, Isabel. Peace, Amy
Brenda
May 4, 2011 at 6:48 pm
You captured me with your first stanza. Butterflies always draw me in. I like “where beating on the wall can cut you to the bone.” Ouch, and yeah.
Engaging write, Amy.
~Brenda
Sharp Little Pencil
May 7, 2011 at 10:21 pm
Thanks, Brenda. And thanks for the Wordle, finally posted it to your blog as well! A
bluejaymama
May 4, 2011 at 7:09 pm
Nice Poem. Good writing and vocabulary you got. Would love you to visit my ABC Wednesday page here.
Debbie
May 4, 2011 at 7:51 pm
Thank you so much for leaving this offering in the comment section at my blog. You have a special gift and calling. I loved the ending of this one!
Sheilagh Lee
May 4, 2011 at 8:12 pm
Such a deep felt poem. Truly beautifully written.
Elizabeth
May 4, 2011 at 8:40 pm
You manage to put it all so succinctly – yet again. x
Sharp Little Pencil
May 6, 2011 at 6:18 am
Thanks so much, Elizabeth. Hopping over to your blog for a look now… A
Kim Nelson
May 4, 2011 at 9:43 pm
How can such lovely images invoke such angst? You did it again, Amy!
Sharp Little Pencil
May 6, 2011 at 6:13 am
Thanks so much, Kim. I’m really feeling good about writing these days, and your encouragement means so much to me. Amy
Mary
May 4, 2011 at 11:53 pm
Wow, Amy, that is ONE strong ending to your strong poem!
Sharp Little Pencil
May 6, 2011 at 6:14 am
Thank you so much, Mary, I was kind of caught up in this one, but in a good way, you know? A
Paul Andrew Russell
May 5, 2011 at 12:51 am
Hi Amy,
I really like the way you put these lines together:
Where they can look in
but she is alone
trapped in prisms
of sunlight’s whim
It made me think of a snow globe, with giant eyes peering in at the person in there, with the sunlight glittering on the flakes floating around. Beautiful but sad. A lovely description.
I know what I’m trying to say but I’m not sure if I explained myself very well. I like this poem though, that’s what I mean. 🙂
Paul
Sharp Little Pencil
May 5, 2011 at 8:17 pm
The snow globe is a wonderful image (except for the drowning in the water part!). I once wrote a poem, Snow-Globe Mind. If I can find it, I email it to you! Amy
Molokai Girl
May 5, 2011 at 1:08 am
I don’t know how you can so readily ‘crank’ out such deep, meaningful, grab you by the jugular prose. Amazing, really-awestruck even.
Now I am wondering about “Ring Around the Rosie”!
Mr. Walker
May 5, 2011 at 1:56 am
Amy, such a great working of the idea of crystal and glass, playing with fragility, distortion, and the fracturing and focusing of light. I love the turn that happens in that last stanza, going from limits to options; you caught me off guard beautifully.
Richard
Sharp Little Pencil
May 5, 2011 at 8:07 pm
Thank you, Richard. The “distortion” you mentioned is often experienced by me when I’m in a manic phase; fortunately, I know how to manage that now. Breathing deeply has a lot to do with it.
And the last stanza wrote itself! Talk about the muse taking the reins, right? Thanks, Amy
pmwanken
May 5, 2011 at 2:47 am
I love how so many of the references are to glass…so fragile. Really a great poem, Amy!
Here’s mine from yesterday…still working on today’s.
~Paula
(P.S. 3rd stanza…second to last line…should “is” be “if”?)
Sharp Little Pencil
May 5, 2011 at 8:04 pm
THank you, Paula. Sometimes, during a manic high, the whole world looks like I’m viewing it through wavy glass; that’s where the seed was. Amy
Renee
May 5, 2011 at 3:03 am
A really well done piece! Sometimes life is like this for many of us at one time or another and making difficult choices when you have limited options can bring you ‘literally’ to the edge. I like this.
Sharp Little Pencil
May 5, 2011 at 7:15 pm
The trick is in keeping balance. I’m manic depressive and have PTSD, and it’s a daily struggle for me, no matter how well I’m cared for by doctors. For others, it’s a different challenge or burden. Tried to keep it open enough that many could relate, and by your response, I think I achieved that. Thanks for your visit, Renee. Amy
contemplativemoorings
May 5, 2011 at 6:07 am
Niiiiiiiice…that’s some sharp writing 🙂
Sharp Little Pencil
May 5, 2011 at 7:12 pm
Thanks so much! I’m going to see what’s up in your blogosphere now! A
Irene
May 5, 2011 at 11:01 am
A feeling of limits, a feeling of teetering.
Sharp Little Pencil
May 5, 2011 at 7:11 pm
That’s exactly it, Irene, thank you for “getting it”! The limit is not only keeping your balance, but what happens when you fall in and cannot get out… Amy
Jae Rose
May 5, 2011 at 11:37 am
The opening verse and particularly ‘Glass carnival’ and the idea of being watched and trapped brought to mind ‘The Bell Jar’..how easy it is to get swallowed up..banging on doors that nobody hears..how we in someway have a choice not to return to that suffocation but on the other hand perhaps can’t avoid it..nobody remembers you when you step off the precipice into that place..always best to be on the outside however close you get to the edge..hmm great write..certainly did ring my bell..Jae
Sharp Little Pencil
May 5, 2011 at 7:08 pm
You know, I wasn’t thinking Bell Jar and now it’s so obvious to me… thank you for that reminder, Jae.
I wish that, when I am on that rim, it would make that ringing noise (like when you run your finger all the way around the rim), kind of like belling the cat, to let others know I’m falling, anyone is falling. And when I see someone inside, I always try to find, you know, a ladder, some way to help them out… because I’ve been there. Thank you for a thoughtful post, Jae. Amy
beespoetry
May 5, 2011 at 7:21 pm
That’s awesome. It’s definitely surreal but at the same time I get such a clear picture in my head- kind of like an Escher, but all bright light and razor-sharp edges (have you seen the photos of the crystal caves in possibly Mexico? like that, but scary beautiful instead of just amazing) and this tiny life in the centre afraid to move a muscle in case the whole thing collapses around her and slices her apart, or someone comes along and crushes the whole thing.
Reminds me of those entomologist glass things, where they keep their dead specimens mounted on pins.
“And I have known the eyes already, known them all-
The eyes that fix you in a formulated phrase,
And when I am formulated, sprawling on a pin,
When I am pinned and wriggling on the wall,
Then how should I begin
To spit out all the butt-ends of my days and ways?
And how should I presume?” -The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock.
Sharp Little Pencil
May 6, 2011 at 5:04 am
Bee, I swear, you think about my poetry more than I do! I have a real love for the Eliot poem, even though it borders on the gruesome there. I had a butterfly once, pinned up, and I was so naive I thought they just picked up dead ones and mounted them. Had no idea they killed the prized, gorgeous butterflies. But your comments reach in and grab the sadness of the poem. Very insightful, Bee, thank you. Amy
M.A.S
May 6, 2011 at 6:37 am
The images here are so fantastic! I absolutely love the first stanza. The simple “down, down, down” anchored between strong, kinetic visuals is great! This is one of my favorites from you.
Yay!
Mike
Sharp Little Pencil
May 7, 2011 at 4:38 am
Michael, thank you so much for this. I’m loving your postings of late as well. You know, now that I think of it, the “down, down, down,” reminds me a bit of the credits from “Mad Men”! Amy
Dina
May 7, 2011 at 5:28 am
I like especially your closing line, a strong conclusion.
Shalom to you.
Sharp Little Pencil
May 7, 2011 at 6:16 am
And to you, Dina. Thank you for visiting! Amy
Blossom Dreams
May 10, 2011 at 9:36 am
A stunning poem Amy!! I can relate to your beautiful words oh, so well! xx
Sharp Little Pencil
May 11, 2011 at 4:22 am
I am so flattered that you have delved into my catalog like this, Blossom! Thank you for all the kind words. Peace, Amy